To: simon1924@live.com
Subject: Re:
Date: Thu, 16 Jul 2009 10:30:07 +0100
Hi Simon,
Thanks for sending the work over.
In general it's an excellent start to experimenting with animation, film making and sound. Here's some more specific comments:
1. Rhythm
Love it as an experimental video. Your sound track is spot on and the edit works perfectly. My preference is the first section, I think you could cut some of the tree section and not really lose out. Maybe it needs a third section to maintain the length of the piece but add intrigue and pace? Good job though. I'd put this as an installation piece - less commercial than the stuff we do but I think it's very worthwhile to have these pieces and it opens up your options in the future.
2. Tomorrow's World
I think I need to know a bit more of a synopsis of this. Are we talking about the TV show or a film? If it's the tv show then I don't think it works as a title sequence but for a film it sits better. For me, as you've said, it lacks some pace. I think what I've seen is perhaps best limited to a 5 second section of the sequence. The credits hold your attention ok, but I think you need more going on with the gfx - although some things are moving the overall feel is too static.
Again, a lot of this depends on what you're trying to achieve and therefore what kind of film/show this is. (e.g. the music is ok for a film that would lead into the opening scene, but it wouldn't work as a tv show.
3. Science Museum
I think this has so much potential and the graphic style is really nice - you need to push it a little further. It's very Saul Bass (a good thing!) but study his stuff more deeply and I think you could turn this into a final year exhibition piece - it's that good. Take a look at the "Catch me if you can" titles and see how you could be much more clever about your transitions.
Watch your grammar though - it's a big turn off when the English isn't correct (this email may be an exception!!!)
Cheers,
James.
James Torry
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